I must have fallen and hit my head on the pavement, I felt hands on my legs and slowly, I slipped away. Then the pulling started, I felt searing pain tearing my insides into million pieces. I wanted to scream but couldn’t. It was a scary feeling. I felt trapped, immobile but my senses were sharp. I wanted to feel my body but it was like being wrapped in a bubble.
It was a floating kind of feeling, if you know what I mean but I guess you don’t. Then darkness came, it was oppressive and in my comatose existence, I welcomed it.
I was like that for God knows how long when suddenly, sounds began to filter to me. It wasn’t clear or anything but I could make out voices. By now, I think I know a bit about my situation but escaping from wherever I am, was impossible.
Again, I tried to touch tangible things but I was weightless, helpless and the floating feeling returned in intensity. Then I realised that my mind could do things. I thought of Tom, my son, and immediately I was racing towards his school, invisible but in a life form all the same.
I breezed inside and saw him in the lecture room, his face ashen and seemed carved out of granite. I wanted to touch him but there was this irrepressible gulf. I felt defeated and thought of my husband. My mind took me on a whirlwind drive back to the hospital.
That was the first time I saw myself.
My bloated face looked blue and lifeless. Tubes were sticking out from every part of my body. Nathan, my husband was speaking but I couldn’t make out the words properly. I concentrated all my energy and studied his lips and finally, caught what he was saying,
‘It’s been five years doctor! I want my wife back.’
The doctor shook his head and patted my husband on the shoulder and slowly walked out of the room.
Then the memories rushed back.
I’ve been in coma for five years? I could float out of my body and see things! I’m trapped. I thought and watched my husband approach me on the bed. He crouched low and his hands slowly found the exposed part of my arm.
‘Please forgive me Carey, I’m so sorry. I tried…’ And his voice trailed away.
What? Wait, don’t pull the plug, I’m here, don’t kill me! Don’t stop my life support!’ I screamed with everything I’ve got but Nathan walked to the other side of the bed and a miracle occurred, he stopped midway. Staring at me.
He paused for a while and looking straight at me he said, ‘I’ll fight for you Carey, I’ll wait. You’ll come back to me and the boys.’
I guess I escaped but how on earth am I going to open my eyes. I can hear things, I can see but the doctors thought I’m brain-dead. I really want to live… Can you please help me?
This story, whatever it is, came to my mind today early in the morning when my three-year old son trotter to my room and crept under the covers. Since my sleep was broken, I thought of the former Israeli Prime minister, Ariel Sharon who had been in a coma since 2006. It’s mysterious how someone could slip into a coma while still alive. Some come out of it and some don’t. I guess we should be thankful for everyday we see the sun. On a lighter note, Carey came out of the coma and it was happy days again. If only life is as simple as fiction.
Thanks for reading and have a brilliant week friends!
Much love. 🙂
This a well thought out story beautifully written.
Thanks! I’m glad you like it.
Good recall from a dreamy. Must be a scary feeling.
I agree, thank God for good health and the sun!
Your words made it so vivid. My heart rate was going up 🙂
Life can be so complex and we must savor every moment. My personal prayer is to LIVE it while I have the chance 🙂
Blessings my friend 🙂
That means you should read my books then 🙂 Those kind of stories happen in real life JC. I totally agree with you, ‘to LIVE it while I have the chance.’
Thanks for your visit my friend!
Much love. 🙂
I really loved this story. You really are a fantastic story teller.
Thanks for your vote of confidence, I appreciate it!
You’re welcome 🙂
Great story, sharp, intriguing and so real. It shows how good you are as a writer!
Thanks so much Christy, I’m glad you think so!
This is & can be so very real.
Here’s a story that’s been on the news here recently & still: http://usnews.nbcnews.com/_news/2014/01/06/22204149-case-of-jahi-mcmath-raises-questions-about-life-after-brain-death
I read the story Rosy and I had tears in my eyes, to think that this could be playing out in real life is sad. I hope Jahi would come out of her coma… it’s possible…
Sandra, this is another great story in the making! Will you take up the challenge? 🙂 Do check your mail for some important info!
Maybe I will, I have so many drafts of intriguing stories lined up but time is my major problem. With three children, a full time job, it’s a bit hectic. I might quit my job and concentrate solely on my writing, then I’ll be able to finish all my drafts.
I checked my mail, thanks for the info! 🙂
Thanks for stopping by, I wish you joy, peace and prosperity this year!
Much love. 🙂
You had me absolutely riveted. Marvellous piece of writing. Thank you.
Thanks Don, I’m glad you like it!
Fascinating story Sandra,you have amazing imagination to create such a plot,so catchy and thrilling.Thank you for keeping in touch.Have a wonderful 2014.jalal
Thanks Jalal for your kind words, I’m glad you like the story. I hope 2014 would be a year of hope, success, love and joy for you my friend!
Great Story. Very Creatively written. I love stories that get me involved. Thank God for each day! Thank God for this moment right now!
Thank God for bringing you to my website. I’m glad you like the story.
I love when a burst of creativity comes in the form of a short story like this. I really enjoyed this one. I could feel the “bubble” you described. Great job!
Thanks Anita, I’m glad you like my short burst of creativity. I’m in the middle of reading Ms. Stich’s guide to long life on your site. She seems interesting and I hope your cold is gone.
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An interesting article. It reminds me of the chap who married my wife and I. He was a bit of character in his youth and had a dreadful scooter accident. He was in a coma for something like 7 months (or was it years?). He lost almost all strength in his arm, but returned to live a normal life for the next 50 years!
I read an earlier comment and my hat is off to you. Three children, working and writing? You must run on batteries. I have 2 kids a day but don’t bring them home with me. 🙂
I can’t stop laughing. 🙂 I run on God’s grace! I also try to plan my time as much as I could and I don’t socialise as such.
Thanks for stopping by!
Thoroughly enjoyed the story and you have some great recall on the details! Have a great week my friend.
beautifully written, as always 🙂
Awwww! Thanks for your kindness!